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Re: Cassidy
Hiya again. Sorry it took me so long to get to this too. I am a slow person. :) Okay: I smacked the magazine I was reading down on the ...
Jul 5, 2009 -
Re: Peace, Love, and California
Sorry it took me so long to get to this. There was a girl in the corner already scribbling on her sketch pad and the girl next to her looked ...
Jun 30, 2009 -
Re: Peace, Love, and California
Here! Yay! :] “Young Artist Academy, please . ” I said to the driver as I slid in the backseat. Should be a comma. =) The panic was building as ...
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: Icy Paths Chapter 1
Hiya Fly, here as I said I would be! Okay, I'm going to skip nitpicks. :] Hmm... this seemed kind of short, and I have no clue what's going on. ...
Jun 23, 2009 -
Re: Solace From The Shadows (Chapter 1)
Hiya there Pixie! I'm Becca, and your reviewer for today. :] Before I get started, I just want to point out that you probably don't want to leave something untitled. ...
Jun 22, 2009 -
Re: Three Things(4)
Becca here and reporting for duty! ^^ Nitpicks; “Hello, Sam,” she repeated in that windy voice of hers , “I’m Theresa.” See the comma in bold? It should be a ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: Three Things(3) *rewritten*
You rewrote it? Well, this is a lot better than what it was before. So lets get started! I mean, look where parties and sneaking out got me. A dinky ...
Jun 15, 2009 -
Re: The Institute, Part Three
Hiya again! I'm going to skip nitpicks, mostly because I didn't find any serious ones. Or, actually, any at all. XP Characters; There wasn't much chance for detail in this ...
Jun 15, 2009 -
Re: The Institute, Part Two
Here! And loving the spy story. Seriously. I think I'm starting to get obessed with it. Anyways, onto the review. Nitpicks; “What confuses you?” she said calmly. Hm. This isn't ...
Jun 15, 2009 -
Re: The Institute, Part One
Ooooh, a spy story! *wide eyes* OKay, so everybody else pretty much got everything. I think you really have a great idea here, and this has potential. Characterization, eh? Well, ...
Jun 15, 2009 -
Re: [Deleted]
Hiya ThornedRose, I'm Becca! Welcome to YWS! Okay, firstly nitpicks: At the moment the words came out of my father’s mouth, I felt a hard, sharp pain in my stomach, ...
Jun 15, 2009 -
Re: Deleted due to lack of quality
Hi there huggybear! I'll be critiquing this today! :) Nitpicks; She gazed in to the mirror for a couple minutes... and hear it comma Her sister. You are writing this ...
Jun 11, 2009 -
Re: Three Things(3)
Hi there again. Looks like June got the gist of it. There's a few things, though: When I groaned and attempted to sit up, another, younger doctor hurried over and ...
Jun 7, 2009 -
Re: Three Things(2)
Hey, sorry that it took me so long to get to this... I kind of got sidetrack. *cough*chat*cough* It seems that they got everything! I loved the conversation between him ...
Jun 6, 2009 -
Re: Loss - Part 2
Hiya Hippie. He couldn't see her. This is kind of plain and out there... I'm not sure how to put it. I suggest putting in there that he was looking ...
Jun 5, 2009
